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Well it appeared to me that he was just poor. Christina offers him a fiver for doing it, so I assumed that's why he had no money. You need to make it clearer. So they contacted him and said "You need to kill people"... And he decides he's going to kill people? If you explained this more I...

I couldn't pick up on any of that motivation, I think you should make it a little bit clearer. Where he originally gets the glove fro, or how he originally meets the people, or where the thing he's listening to in the headphones comes from should probably be explained, too. I mean from about...

OK, well firstly you really need to proof-read your script once you've finished it, because there's so many little mistakes all over the pages and it's annoying to read them all. This one I found funny, however: "pulls out a clawed glove with claws". Just check on that next time! Also, page 4...

I like the premise, I just think you need to go back and redraft it a lot. If you want some ideas on what I'd do I'd be willing to talk to you about it.

The screenplay isn't ready yet I don't think. It still needs a lot of work and probably a few more redrafts. It's the same thing continuously for 20 minutes, and there's not let up or anything else to happen, just 20 minutes of trying to make us jump out our seats, and soon we'll get used to it...

I'd be willing to write one, I love history and the two world wars. How long would it have to be and what would I/we receive in return? Thanks.

It basically felt like the modern equivalent of Jaws, a monster movie with less focus on the monster than the actual people involved. I thought the camera work was great, took me a good 10 minutes to get used to it because at first I just couldn't focus, but I thought it was pretty good...

I'd go with a PC. I custom built mine to my own spec, and they seem a lot more approachable, upgrade-wise, than Macs do. The software is there, you'd me missing out on Final Cut Pro but there are alternatives that are of the same standard. Personally I'd go PC, plus if you ever get bored you've...

Hey guys, I've done a few short films already, and wanted to try my hand at the sort of London gangster stories. I'd really love if you could check it over and give me some feedback on it. I'll send it through email if anyone is interested in checking it out.