critique my film

[bturner]

Please have a look. it's only about 3min. your ideas and comments are grealty appreciated. thanks

blake

http://youtube.com/watch?v=nXkk1CoVBSI

 

[bing_chandler]

The video is good technically with jump cuts and camera movements. But what was the message in it? I couldnt follow the story, idea.

 

[bturner]

thanks for your response. the young man is struggling to come up with an idea, during the process he suffers from a but of insanity only to be brought back to reality by his friend entering the room again.
i used the project to show progression of time without dialogue.
thanks again


blake

 

[bing_chandler]

thanks for your response. the young man is struggling to come up with an idea, during the process he suffers from a but of insanity only to be brought back to reality by his friend entering the room again.
i used the project to show progression of time without dialogue.
thanks again


blake

Watched it again. Now could identify the insanity.