Short Film Story Feedback: A Teenage Boy with Supernatural Powers

[PowerDeo]

Hey, I'm planning on making a short 6-8 minutes film about a supernatural teenage boy of about 15 years called Jim.
The day Jim was born, doctors noticed that his brainwaves were much different than a normal person but they did not find anything wrong with Jim, everything went fine, he was healthy, could see, talk... And he grew up and nothing unusual happens with him, he just grew like a normal boy. One day, when he's 15 years old, he spots a familiar face in the distance and gets very frightened when the other person also spots him. He starts running away from him but at a certain point he ends up in a dead end street and the other person pulls out his gun and shoots Jim. As a reflex Jim puts his hand in front and a few moments later he notices that the bullet has just stopped in front of his hand. When he pulls down his hand the bullet directly went in the opposite direction right into the stranger. Shocked by this Jim goes to an old friend and asks him what is wrong with him. The friend explains that he does not know how and why he got this ability but he does know that there are people that want that everyone in this world is equal and that no one has more power than the other. He tells Jim that it's best to stay low profile but Jim gets discovered and from here he has got to fight his way through.
In reality too I'm 15 so my options aren't that wide. I can't make a too complicated movie because that will ask money and that is what I don't have What I do have is Adobe After Effects, Adobe Premiere Pro, 3D Studio Max, Autodesk Maya, Fx lab pro and Adobe Photoshop. So I decided to make the best out of it and try out as many special effects as possible. So is it ok?

 

[cat_oates]

I think the story line is a bit like many films that involve super powers are out there that means that it does obviously work

However, maybes it is a bit stereotypical and the short films I have seen are more so to do with people's life or life problems than this

If you feel comfortable doing it and have resources to produce it, go ahead. Everyone starts somewhere. However, I would maybes suggest you keep this idea and maybe try turning it into a script for a full length feature film.

 

[jodymichelle]

do what you're passionate about

do what you're passionate about

My first reaction is to say that it's a good place to start because you've got to start somewhere. As far as the story itself, it's not my taste. However, what's important is that it should be something that you are the most passionate about. It also depends on how fast you need to finish your short film, and the core of what you want to showcase. Do you want to showcase that you can make professional looking effects? And therefore, the story is not that important, as long as it makes people laugh and go, "wow," or "hmmm," (like the song).

 

[temerson]

Why did the doctors conduct an EKG on an infant? It seems out of place to give a baby a brain scan only days out of the womb.